Student Revision 1
Mickey Mouse is a well loved symbol of the greatness of America because he represents a long carefree era when everything in the world has gone well for the most prosperous nation on earth. The fame of Mickey Mouse has spread around the world in the same way that Coca Cola and MacDonalds have arrived in even the most obscure corners of the earth. He symbolizes the prosperity of Americans throughout a period when they have dominated the world both economically and politically. Mickey Mouse has become a movie star and a household name. This symbolizes the American dream where everyone (including apparently rodents and quite possibly many other non-human personalities) can expect freedom of speech, freedom of actions and freedom to make an honest living.
While it is true that Mickey Mouse symbolizes America this should not be regarded as a positive but rather a negative feature of the small rodent's character. He has been promoted by the American publicity machine. This is a form of insidious colonialism that is far more evil than the European colonialism of the past. In their era the Europeans were unstoppable just as Mickey Mouse and all that follows is unstoppable. The important difference is that European colonialism was immediately noticeable and, therefore, more possible to resist.
Mickey and Minnie Mouse demonstrate socially acceptable inter-personal behavior with their collection of animal friends. These characters have developed as vehicles for teaching young children the key elements of social behavior. Parents of today have grown up on the antics of Mickey Mouse and his friends and are happy for their children to do so. However, some people think he is not the role model who shows children how to interact socially with groups of friends and with individuals of the opposite sex. But he is a dictator who moulds children to social behaviour patterns which are alien to their society. He fosters rampant consumerism among nations who are economically unready for it, thus, creating bankrupted dependent client states. He also contributes to linguistic colonization.
Is this text guilty of plagiarism? If so, what exactly is wrong? How can you correct it? Your comments:
Yes, this a clear example of plagiarism. Mostly of the texts were copied directly though the order of which the sentences/phrases appear were rearranged and as a result of rearranging those texts,the viewpoints of the two authors somewhat became vague. This text did not even recognize the sources of its contents. If the writer of this text added his/her own opinions or comments to the subject matter, it's barely noticeable. It's as if he/she hadn't done any job at all.
To correct this, for starters, the writer of this text must have recognized the author/s of the source texts. He/she must have at least tried to paraphrased the texts from the authors and added his/her own viewpoints, comments, or comparison and/or contrast of the authors' views. And to make it perfectly, he must also have explained clearly and thoroughly the authors' complementing if not, conflicting viewpoints.
Student Revision 2
Michel Souris says Mickey Mouse, the charming little mouse from Walt Disney, is known around the world. He is considered a playful character who often gets into trouble but inevitably comes out on top. His resourcefulness and wit are regarded as symbolizing all that is best about America and the Americans. While it is true that Mickey Mouse symbolizes America this should not be regarded as a positive but rather a negative feature of the small rodent's character.
R.O. Dent also says that it is significant that a creature often viewed in other countries as a pest to be eradicated can rise in the United States of America to become a movie star and a household name. This symbolises the American dream where everyone (including apparently rodents and quite possibly many other non-human personalities) can expect freedom of speech, freedom of actions and freedom to make an honest living. It is important to note in this context that the rise to fame and or riches of an underdog has long been a popular theme in the folk lore of western countries in general but of America in particular.
Michel Souris also says that the fame of Mickey Mouse has spread around the world in the same way that Coca Cola and MacDonalds have arrived in even the most obscure corners of the earth. It has been promoted by the American publicity machine. This is a form of insidious colonialism that is far more evil than the European colonialism of the past. In their era the Europeans were unstoppable just as Mickey Mouse and all that follows is unstoppable. The important difference is that European colonialism was immediately noticeable and, therefore, more possible to resist.
He also says that for nine tenths of the world Mickey Mouse is not, in fact, the lovable underdog who manages to succeed in the land of plenty. He is not the role model who shows children how to interact socially with groups of friends and with individuals of the opposite sex. He is, by contrast, a dictator who moulds children to social behaviour patterns which are alien to their society. He fosters rampant consumerism among nations who are economically unready for it, thus, creating bankrupted dependent client states. He also contributes to linguistic colonization.
Is this text guilty of plagiarism? If so, what exactly is wrong? How can you correct it? Your comments:Yes, this text is still guilty of plagiarism. Though the writer of this text recognized the authors of its source texts whenever the text appears,he/she just done a mere direct copying of the texts. Albeit the texts were ordered properly in such a way to make the points more coherent and relevant, the writer didn't clearly distinguish which parts were his/her own and which parts were just merely copied. The only good thing of this text is it was able to recognize the source texts' authors and that is all.
To remedy this fault, the writer must have made a comparison and/or contrast of the authors' viewpoints to make it more comprehensive, added his own opinions and wrote it in such a way that a reader can distinguish which of the texts were his/her own and not. In other words, to make the reader be able to gauge how much work was done by the writer.
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